Thank you for the welcome. I appreciate it. Currently I'm most worried about my action and description, I have a few published author friends, and they insist that I'm good with dialogue, but I tend to have little action, and just skip description.
Where would be a good place to get feedback on that?
Try Roving Crits, and/or sign up for Private Roving Crits. I'm not sure how active those boards are (I'm currently smashed by other parts of my life), but Roving is usually a great place to get critiques on short pieces.
If you crit others' work first, you'll normally get more responses, too.