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Mesg #90724 "RE: The power of sentences"
Author Weird Jim     Click to send email to this author Click to send private message to this author Click to view this author's profile Click to add this author to your buddy list
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Date Wed Apr-18-12 08:33 PM
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And to your question, Jim I think intentional redundancy for effect is fine. It's a style choice that, if used well, can be effective and awesome.

At times they, redundant words, can slow the action a little giving the reader time to absorb what it is that the writer wants them to picture.

"Circled around" might imply that it's a continuing thing, that there was more than one circle. "He took the calendar and circled around his children's birthdates with a red marker. (Not a very good example).

On the writing advice, often I can pick up a little here and there that suits my personality, and leave the rest, which usually doesn't stick with me anyway.


Weird Jim

"Good reading is the only test of good writing"
Robertson Davies. A voice from the attic 1960

  

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The power of sentences [View all] , mooseythehut, Tue Apr-17-12 01:44 PM
  RE: The power of sentences, CatrinP, Apr 17th 2012, #1
RE: The power of sentences, Weird Jim, Apr 17th 2012, #2
RE: The power of sentences, mooseythehut, Apr 17th 2012, #3
      RE: The power of sentences, Weird Jim, Apr 18th 2012 #5
RE: The power of sentences, Weird Jim, Apr 18th 2012, #4

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