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90724, RE: The power of sentences
Posted by Weird Jim, Wed Apr-18-12 08:33 PM
And to your question, Jim I think intentional redundancy for effect is fine. It's a style choice that, if used well, can be effective and awesome.

At times they, redundant words, can slow the action a little giving the reader time to absorb what it is that the writer wants them to picture.

"Circled around" might imply that it's a continuing thing, that there was more than one circle. "He took the calendar and circled around his children's birthdates with a red marker. (Not a very good example).

On the writing advice, often I can pick up a little here and there that suits my personality, and leave the rest, which usually doesn't stick with me anyway.

Weird Jim

"Good reading is the only test of good writing"
Robertson Davies. A voice from the attic 1960